Falling red drops..

I knock twice.

No reply.

Using my key, I enter the house.

My wife lies on the cot in the bedroom.

I go inside. A pool of red is dripping slowly to the floor from near her head.

My two year old sits nearby her, crying.

She sees me and says, “I broke mommy’s inkpot.”

(July 30th, 2012)

26 thoughts on “Falling red drops..”

Apala Monday, 30th July, 2012 at 12:12:50 PM

nice!! i love 55ers…!

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Leo Post authorMonday, 30th July, 2012 at 3:23:03 PM

I know, Apala You’re an expert in 55ers…! Glad you liked it. Cheers!

- Leo.

Die Reise meines Leben Monday, 30th July, 2012 at 1:42:38 PM

For a moment, I thought it was a piece to do with murder..was very surprised at the unexpected turn of events. Good work!

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Leo Post authorMonday, 30th July, 2012 at 3:15:18 PM

That was what I was trying to get Thank you, Clarice! Cheers.

- Leo.

Green Speck Monday, 30th July, 2012 at 2:50:12 PM

An unexpected twist in the end … good word play !!!

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Leo Post authorMonday, 30th July, 2012 at 3:10:01 PM

I think the 55 fiction form is characterized by that unexpected twist, Mr.Speck Thanks!

- Leo.

Sohini Monday, 30th July, 2012 at 5:18:22 PM

loved the unpredicitbility, almost anticipated a murder there!

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Sohini Monday, 30th July, 2012 at 5:20:22 PM

*unpredictability, regret the typo
Leo Post authorMonday, 30th July, 2012 at 8:40:54 PM

No issues

- Leo.
Leo Post authorMonday, 30th July, 2012 at 8:40:41 PM

Thank you, Sohini Glad you liked it!

- Leo.

Divenita Er (@DivenitaEr) Monday, 30th July, 2012 at 7:42:34 PM

The surprise end was too goood

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Leo Post authorMonday, 30th July, 2012 at 10:32:41 PM

Glad you liked it, Divenita Cheers.

- Leo.

Before reading the last line mind was all ready to read the misshapen but the twist at last moment reversed my expectation. Amazing Dearo!

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Leo Post authorMonday, 30th July, 2012 at 10:34:07 PM

Thank you, Sims Glad that ending held that twist! Cheers!

- Leo.

jaishvats Tuesday, 31st July, 2012 at 10:08:50 AM

Hi Leo
That was awesome .

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jaishvats Tuesday, 31st July, 2012 at 10:17:58 AM

In fact Leo I interpreted it differently . Thought that in fact a murder had happened and that the child could not understand it !
Leo Post authorTuesday, 31st July, 2012 at 10:20:57 AM

I believe that to be a trademark of a 55 fiction now. The development of the plot in one direction before the ending twists it another way! Thank you, Jaish

- Leo.
Leo Post authorTuesday, 31st July, 2012 at 10:20:00 AM

Thanks, Jaish

- Leo.